besser/transparenter

English translation: [Type of IT process optimisation] will make us better yet for our entire clientele to benefit, besides becoming more transparent

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German term or phrase:	Mit [type of IT process optimisation] werden wir besser und transparenter – für alle Kunden!
English translation:	[Type of IT process optimisation] will make us better yet for our entire clientele to benefit, besides becoming more transparent
Entered by:	Sebastian Witte

08:32 Aug 27, 2017

German to English translations [PRO]
Marketing - Transport / Transportation / Shipping

German term or phrase: besser/transparenter

Dear all,

I am translating a marketing magazine from the field of logistics into UK English.

Source:
„Mit [type of IT process optimisation] werden wir besser und transparenter – für alle Kunden!“

Target:
"Delivering to your doorstep the [type of IT process optimisation] way: Enhanced performance and transparency for all customers".

Could the community please give me a hand here as I am at my wit's end with this headline?
In the unlikely event of one or two colleagues approving of the basic idea and design of the English, I would very much appreciate your shortening it with sophistication so that it can be used in the actual English magazine. Perhaps you could even try and see whether the two English phrases can be merged with sophistication to form one phrase that still does not compromise too much on the gist of the German?

So yes, what I would need here is something between translation and copywriting, preferably a bit closer to translation as the job instructions clearly say "translation is needed".

Thanks.

Cheers,

Sebastian Witte

Sebastian Witte KudoZ activity Questions: 1501 (none open) (73 closed without grading) Answers: 1077 Germany
Local time: 05:22

better yet and more transparent

Explanation:
XXXX will make us better yet for our entire clientele to benefit, in addition to becoming more transparent

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gangels (X)
Local time: 21:22

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4 KudoZ points were awarded for this answer

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4 +2

will make us both better and more transparent

Michael Martin, MA

3 +1

improve/more tranparent

Martin Ris

better yet and more transparent

gangels (X)

Discussion entries: 4

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8 hrs confidence:

better yet and more transparent

Explanation:
XXXX will make us better yet for our entire clientele to benefit, in addition to becoming more transparent

gangels (X)
Local time: 21:22
Meets criteria
Works in field
Native speaker of:

English,

German
PRO pts in category: 74

Notes to answerer

Asker: Thanks.

13 hrs confidence:

peer agreement (net): +2

will make us both better and more transparent

Explanation:
XXX will make us both better and more transparent, benefiting all our customers

Michael Martin, MA
United States
Local time: 23:22
Meets criteria
Native speaker of:

German,

English
PRO pts in category: 30

Notes to answerer

Asker: This is also a valid option. Much appreciated.

3 days 2 hrs confidence:

peer agreement (net): +1

improve/more tranparent

Explanation:
Keep it simple - With [IT optimization], we will improve and become more transparent - for all clients!

Martin Ris
United States
Local time: 23:22
Meets criteria
Native speaker of:

German,

English
PRO pts in category: 4

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