Apr 8, 2008 17:08
16 yrs ago
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English term
Veni Vidi Vici
Native in: Russian 
, Ukrainian
Works in: Russian to English, English to Russian, Ukrainian to English, and 5 more.
please advise of a suitable word
English
Tech/Engineering
Internet, e-Commerce
retrieve password letter
It's a retrive password letter from a web site (web site name changed to XXX).
I am providing the complete letter template to give the full context.
I believe some word or phrase shall be added in the text where marked . Something like "from now on".
Please advise.
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Dear {{FirstName}} {{LastName}},
You told us you had forgotten your XXX password and requested a new one.
Your account data are as follows:
User Name {{Login}} (the user name you selected when registering at XXX)
Password: {{Password}} (new password generated by the system)
Please use this password to sign in to the XXX system.
You will be able to use this password or you may change it to any other password of your choice.
To change the password, please sign in and go to Account -> My Personal Data.
Please do not reply to this e-mail.
Sincerely Yours,
XXX Team
I am providing the complete letter template to give the full context.
I believe some word or phrase shall be added in the text where marked . Something like "from now on".
Please advise.
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Dear {{FirstName}} {{LastName}},
You told us you had forgotten your XXX password and requested a new one.
Your account data are as follows:
User Name {{Login}} (the user name you selected when registering at XXX)
Password: {{Password}} (new password generated by the system)
Please use this password to sign in to the XXX system.
You will be able to use this password or you may change it to any other password of your choice.
To change the password, please sign in and go to Account -> My Personal Data.
Please do not reply to this e-mail.
Sincerely Yours,
XXX Team
Responses
| 4 +12 | I'd rephrase the whole sentence |
Mark Berelekhis
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| 3 +3 | effective immediately |
jccantrell
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| 5 | password is set |
Matthew McGuinness
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| 4 | going forward / from now on |
PoveyTrans (X)
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Responses
+12
5 mins
Mark Berelekhis
United States
United States
Native in English
&
English
Works in field
United States
Exemplary quality, truly bilingual
Native in: Russian 
, English
Works in: Russian to English, English to Russian, English
Related KudoZ points
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16
Selected
I'd rephrase the whole sentence
Not crazy about how it sounds, so I'd modify it a bit:
"You will have the option of keeping this password or changing it to any other password of your choice."
"You will have the option of keeping this password or changing it to any other password of your choice."
Peer comment(s):
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Can Altinbay
: Really nice. I would also redo some of the other sentences, especially the one beginning "You told us...".
6 mins
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Thank you, Can. You're right, but one at a time :)
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BrettMN
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Thank you, Brett.
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NancyLynn
46 mins
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Thank you, NancyLynn.
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Refugio
1 hr
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Thank you, Ruth.
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veratek
3 hrs
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Thank you, Vera.
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Madeleine MacRae Klintebo
4 hrs
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Thank you, Madeleine.
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Mikhail Kropotov
6 hrs
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Thank you, Mikhail.
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Chris Rowson (X)
: Or "You have the option ..."?
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Yep. Thank you, Chris.
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kmtext
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Thank you, km.
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Vicky Nash
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Thank you, Vicky.
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orientalhorizon
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Thank you, oriental.
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V_Nedkov
5 days
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Thank you, V_N.
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4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "Many thanks to all answerers!"
2 mins
going forward / from now on
or as you say, from now on
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Note added at 2 mins (2008-04-08 17:10:55 GMT)
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I think your solution is fine ...
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Note added at 2 mins (2008-04-08 17:10:55 GMT)
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I think your solution is fine ...
+3
40 mins
jccantrell
United States
United States
Native in English
&
English
United States
Was nicht ist, kann noch werden.
Native in: English (Variant: US)
Works in: German to English
Related KudoZ points
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4
effective immediately
Might be how I would phrase it.
7 days
password is set
You will be able to use this password <*** > or you may change it to any other password of your choice.
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You may choose another password at any time.
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You may choose another password at any time.
Discussion
How about this sentence? Than it will flow on to the next sentence.
Your new password is xxxxxx, or you may change it to a password of your choice after logging in.