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Sunday Mornin' Comin' Down

Well, I woke up Sunday morning
With no way to hold my head that didn't hurt.
And the beer I had for breakfast wasn't bad,
So I had one more for dessert.
Then I fumbled in my closet through my clothes
And found my cleanest dirty shirt.
Then I washed my face and combed my hair
And stumbled down the stairs to meet the day.

I'd smoked my mind the night before
With cigarettes and songs I'd been picking.
But I lit my first and watched a small kid
Playing with a can that he was kicking.
Then I walked across the street
And caught the Sunday smell of someone's frying chicken.
And Lord, it took me back to something that I'd lost
Somewhere, somehow along the way.

On a Sunday morning sidewalk,
I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned.
'Cause there's something in a Sunday
That makes a body feel alone.
And there's nothing short a' dying
That's half as lonesome as the sound
Of the sleeping city sidewalk
And Sunday morning coming down.

In the park I saw a daddy
With a laughing little girl that he was swinging.
And I stopped beside a Sunday school
And listened to the songs they were singing.
Then I headed down the street,
And somewhere far away a lonely bell was ringing,
And it echoed through the canyon
Like the disappearing dreams of yesterday.

On a Sunday morning sidewalk,
I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned.
'Cause there's something in a Sunday
That makes a body feel alone.
And there's nothing short a' dying
That's half as lonesome as the sound
Of the sleeping city sidewalk
And Sunday morning coming down.

The winning entry has been announced in this pair.

There were 18 entries submitted in this pair during the submission phase, 3 of which were selected by peers to advance to the finals round. The winning entry was determined based on finals round voting by peers.

Competition in this pair is now closed.


Entries (18 total; 3 finalists) Expand all entries

Entry #14818 — Discuss 0
Winner
Voting points1st2nd3rd
10220 x48 x26 x1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.023.11 (82 ratings)2.93 (67 ratings)
Entry3.693.88 (8 ratings)3.50 (4 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 8 users entered 14 "like" tags
  • 13 users agreed with "likes" (47 total agrees)
  • 3 users disagreed with "likes" (4 total disagrees)
+6
gueule de bois
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
gueule de bois.
Flows well
Catherine De Crignis
+3
Au p'tit déj'
Flows well
Jocelyne Cuenin
+4
ma chemise la moins sale
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
+4
débarbouillé
Good term selection
Hélène ALEXIS
+1
repeigné
Good term selection
Jenny Ann Rydberg
-2
+3
3
de cette journée.
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+5
enfumé la tête
Good term selection
biwi
+7
1
À coup de clopes
Good term selection
biwi
-2
+3
2
devenue son ballon.
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+1
de friture d'un poulet.
Other
distance f​rom origin​al to save​ intended ​mood and r​hythm is f​ine with m​e; but 'd'​une fritur​e de poule​t' would f​low better​, it seems​ to me...
Marc Brunet
+4
ont ce je ne sais quoi Qui
Good term selection
biwi
+2
il n'y a rien de plus mortel
Flows well
Jocelyne Cuenin
+4
1
Le temps d'écoute
Flows well
bonne tran​sition
Isabelle Cluzel
Entry #14519 — Discuss 0
Finalist
Voting points1st2nd3rd
10021 x47 x22 x1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.882.78 (78 ratings)2.98 (67 ratings)
Entry3.553.60 (5 ratings)3.50 (2 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 6 users entered 16 "like" tags
  • 11 users agreed with "likes" (59 total agrees)
  • 5 users disagreed with "likes" (5 total disagrees)
-3
+4
2
échapper à mon mal aux cheveux
Flows well
Exactement
biwi
+5
passait bien comme petit déjeuner
Good term selection
Bonne repr​ise du par​allèle "co​mme pt déj​/ comme de​ssert"
biwi
+2
1
farfouillé
Other
mixed resp​onse about​ this one:​ gloss reg​ister is r​ight; bris​k action i​nconsisten​t with sto​ned mind.
Marc Brunet
+4
dégotté
Flows well
biwi
+4
la plus propre de mes chemises sales
Flows well
mafrade
+5
ébarbouillé
Good term selection
Hélène ALEXIS
+4
dégringolé
Good term selection
biwi
+5
affronte
Good term selection
biwi
+6
enfumé
Good term selection
Muriel Péneaud
+3
gamin
Good term selection
'mot juste​' evoking ​a street u​rchin
Marc Brunet
+2
shooter dans
Good term selection
biwi
+5
quelque part, comme ça, en chemin
Good term selection
biwi
+2
défoncé
Good term selection
Jenny Ann Rydberg
-2
+1
2
esseulé
Good term selection
Jenny Ann Rydberg
+3
s'évanouissaient les rêves d'hier
Flows well
biwi
Entry #14749 — Discuss 0
Finalist
Voting points1st2nd3rd
435 x46 x211 x1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments3.052.86 (61 ratings)3.25 (54 ratings)
Entry3.132.75 (4 ratings)3.50 (2 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 3 users entered 7 "like" tags
  • 3 users agreed with "likes" (7 total agrees)
  • 4 users disagreed with "likes" (5 total disagrees)
-3
2
qui s'en vient
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
-1
+1
1
A chaque mouvement mon cerveau souffrait
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
+2
descendue au petit déjeuner
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
-1
+1
1
en tâtonnant
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
+1
En chemin, je sais plus où, ni comment.
Flows well
Jocelyne Cuenin
+2
1
défoncé
Good term selection
Jenny Ann Rydberg
s'évanouissaient
Flows well
biwi


Non-finalist entries

The following entries were not selected by peers to advance to finals-round voting.

Entry #14401 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.762.53 (64 ratings)2.99 (55 ratings)
Entry2.502.00 (3 ratings)3.00 (1 rating)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 4 users entered 6 "like" tags
  • 2 users agreed with "likes" (3 total agrees)
  • 1 user disagreed with "likes" (1 total disagree)
penderie
Good term selection
Jenny Ann Rydberg
au hasard
Other
good effor​t to rende​r that moo​d, but sug​gesting 'a​u p'tit bo​nheur' ins​tead to fi​t with pre​viously su​ggested ' ​piquées'. ​Does not f​it the met​er of of t​his verse ​(too long!​), so woul​d more wor​k to use i​t.
Marc Brunet
+1
qui se rapproche autant
Good term selection
biwi
-1
+1
Qui fait se sentir seul avec soi
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+1
se rapproche autant de la mort
Good term selection
biwi
plus esseulant
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
Entry #14561 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.712.70 (80 ratings)2.73 (67 ratings)
Entry3.343.43 (7 ratings)3.25 (4 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 1 user entered 3 "like" tags
  • 1 user agreed with "likes" (3 total agrees)
+1
odeur dominicale d'poulet rôti
Good term selection
biwi
+1
A part la mort, rien
Good term selection
biwi
+1
déprimant qu'un trottoir muet
Good term selection
biwi
Entry #14794 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.692.73 (74 ratings)2.66 (63 ratings)
Entry2.542.40 (5 ratings)2.67 (3 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 3 users entered 5 "like" tags
  • 2 users agreed with "likes" (3 total agrees)
  • 1 user disagreed with "likes" (1 total disagree)
+1
Lent déclin du
Good term selection
Joue sur l​es 2 sens ​propre et ​figuré
biwi
+1
farfouillé
Good term selection
Virginie Mair
démarrer la journée
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+1
shootant dans
Good term selection
biwi
Entry #14827 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.692.58 (66 ratings)2.80 (60 ratings)
Entry3.173.00 (5 ratings)3.33 (3 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 1 user entered 1 "like" tag
embrumé mon esprit
Good term selection
biwi
Entry #14461 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.662.57 (59 ratings)2.74 (55 ratings)
Entry3.452.40 (5 ratings)4.50 (2 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 1 user entered 2 "like" tags
faire face à la journée
Flows well
exactement
biwi
à part mourir
Good term selection
biwi
Entry #14392 — Discuss 1
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.622.83 (88 ratings)2.40 (69 ratings)
Entry3.233.70 (10 ratings)2.75 (4 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 3 users entered 13 "like" tags
  • 5 users agreed with "likes" (11 total agrees)
  • 1 user disagreed with "likes" (2 total disagrees)
-1
+1
faut pas que j'me penche
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+1
siffle
Good term selection
Muriel Péneaud
Et une deuxième
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
-1
+4
Pas une seule chemise propre, c'est dingue
Flows well
Virginie Mair
nuit de mélodies et de cigarettes
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
avise
Good term selection
Muriel Péneaud
titille les narines
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+2
la solitude dans l'âme
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
Rien à faire c'est mortel,
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+1
pavé
Good term selection
Muriel Péneaud
me vrillent
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
Son triste écho emplit la vallée,
Flows well
Muriel Péneaud
+2
c'est le glas des rêves
Good term selection
Virginie Mair
Entry #14758 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.552.74 (82 ratings)2.36 (64 ratings)
Entry3.423.50 (8 ratings)3.33 (3 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 2 users entered 3 "like" tags
blues
Flows well
biwi
brouillard
Good term selection
Laurette Tassin
silence de mort
Good term selection
biwi
Entry #14516 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.502.48 (73 ratings)2.51 (64 ratings)
Entry2.002.00 (5 ratings)2.00 (1 rating)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 4 users entered 5 "like" tags
  • 2 users agreed with "likes" (3 total agrees)
Dans le cirage
Good term selection
Virginie Mair
+2
j’ai dégoté
Good term selection
Virginie Mair
la plus propre de mes chemises sales
Flows well
mafrade
+1
ramené loin en arrière, vers des souvenirs oubliés,
Good term selection
sauf le mo​t "loin"
biwi
défoncé.
Good term selection
Jenny Ann Rydberg
Entry #14482 — Discuss 0
Rating typeOverallQualityAccuracy
Segments2.442.36 (75 ratings)2.51 (63 ratings)
Entry2.102.20 (5 ratings)2.00 (2 ratings)
Entry tagging:
 
 
  • 2 users entered 4 "like" tags
  • 1 user agreed with "likes" (1 total agree)
tête douloureuse où que j'la mette
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
poulet frit du dimanche
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
Quelqu' part, un jour, dans ma vie
Flows well
Jenny Ann Rydberg
+1
être raide-mort
Good term selection
Virginie Mair