20:08 Feb 19, 2005 |
English language (monolingual) [PRO] Art/Literary - Poetry & Literature / children's literature | |||||||
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navigating huge heaps of stones and rough mountain streams Explanation: "navigate" also means to manoeuver through, to make one's way safely through, not necessarily steering a boat, so it applies equally well to land obstacles and water obstacles -------------------------------------------------- Note added at 1 hr 13 mins (2005-02-19 21:21:26 GMT) -------------------------------------------------- Glavo was in the lead riding Blackwind, who was moving cautiously along the path while casting nervous glances at the gaping abyss alongside. The others followed, trying ... etc. |
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Rockfall Barriers -/- Rockslide Debris -/- Mounds of Stone -/- Heaps of Stone Rubble Explanation: --- |
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stones in the/ir way (?) Explanation: You are right; it doesn't fit the register. Also, "rapid" sounds a bit odd. Why not "swiftly-flowing"? Oh, and "his Blackwind" is not the best. "His horse[?] Blackwind", or just "Blackwind" would be better. -------------------------------------------------- Note added at 5 mins (2005-02-19 20:13:45 GMT) -------------------------------------------------- Sorry, I didn\'t read your question properly: why not \"huge piles of stones blocking their way\"? Or something like that... -------------------------------------------------- Note added at 1 hr 30 mins (2005-02-19 21:38:39 GMT) -------------------------------------------------- I think that the use of \"rapids\" in the sense you mention may be *why* the adjective sounds funny. |
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huge rock obstacle Explanation: blockage |
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clambering over rockfalls obstructing their pathway Explanation: Clambering gives the sense of effort needed in struggling over the piles of rocks, which as they are lying on a path must have fallen there. Rapidly flowing mountain streams.. Cascading mountain streams.. |
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mounds of stones Explanation: I want to mention that - I think "stone obstructions" is ok, it doesn't sound too bad. |
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