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too many of's ?

English translation: description of possible variants of creating a data security system...

14:38 Dec 10, 2007
English language (monolingual) [PRO]
Tech/Engineering - Computers: Software
English term or phrase: too many of's ?
This is title of a document. I believe there is too many of's Please help me rehrase it (if it is necessary). Or maybe it is ok as is?

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Description of the possible variants of creation of data security system in the client-server architecture.
Alexander Onishko
Selected answer:description of possible variants of creating a data security system...
Explanation:
That's got rid of one "of", and I should leave it at that. There is a tendency for Russians translating into English to avoid the word "of" like the plague as an equivalent of the genitive in Russian. This can be overdone, and result in a long string of nouns used as adjectives, which does not sound natural in English.
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Jack Doughty
United Kingdom
Local time: 12:13
Grading comment
many thanks to all!
4 KudoZ points were awarded for this answer



SUMMARY OF ALL EXPLANATIONS PROVIDED
4 +7description of possible variants of creating a data security system...
Jack Doughty
5 +5Description of the possible variants in creating a data security system in the client-server archite
conejo
3possibilities
BusterK
3try approaches instead of variants
Nik-On/Off
3Possible variants in creating client-server architecture data security system
Suzan Hamer


  

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5 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 4/5Answerer confidence 4/5 peer agreement (net): +7
description of possible variants of creating a data security system...


Explanation:
That's got rid of one "of", and I should leave it at that. There is a tendency for Russians translating into English to avoid the word "of" like the plague as an equivalent of the genitive in Russian. This can be overdone, and result in a long string of nouns used as adjectives, which does not sound natural in English.

Jack Doughty
United Kingdom
Local time: 12:13
Native speaker of: English
PRO pts in category: 56
Grading comment
many thanks to all!

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  orientalhorizon
8 mins
  -> Thank you.
agree  Can Altinbay: conejo's answer was my first thought, but this one shines.
21 mins
  -> Thank you.
agree  Shera Lyn Parpia: yes.
22 mins
  -> Thank you.
agree  V_Nedkov
56 mins
  -> Thank you.
agree  Mehmet Hascan
1 hr
  -> Thank you.
agree  Sabine Akabayov, PhD
1 hr
  -> Thank you.
agree  Alexander Taguiltsev: Jack, you have a good feel of Russian language. In Russian, repetition of same preposition is an indication of bad language and is unnatural as well as a long string of nouns used as adjectives in English. That's why there is eternal question about of's.
1 day 6 hrs
  -> Thank you. That's given me a better understanding of the problem.
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8 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 5/5 peer agreement (net): +5
too many of\'s ?
Description of the possible variants in creating a data security system in the client-server archite


Explanation:
Old: Description of the possible variants of creation of data security system in the client-server architecture.

New: Description of the possible variants in creating a data security system in the client-server architecture

I think this sounds more natural. Good luck!

conejo
United States
Local time: 06:13
Works in field
Native speaker of: English
PRO pts in category: 8

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  orientalhorizon
5 mins
  -> Thanks.
agree  Mehmet Hascan
8 mins
  -> Thanks.
agree  Patricia Rosas
12 mins
  -> Thanks.
agree  Buck
1 hr
  -> Thanks.
agree  NancyLynn
4 hrs
  -> Thanks.
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9 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 3/5Answerer confidence 3/5
too many of\'s ?
possibilities


Explanation:
1° Possible variants of creation of data security system in the client-server architecture: Description (provided there are other similar titles)

2° Description of the possible variants of data security system creation in the client-server architecture.

3° Creation of data security system in the client-server architecture: Description of the possible variants

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Note added at 9 minutes (2007-12-10 14:48:52 GMT)
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my preference is #3.

BusterK
Local time: 13:13
Native speaker of: Native in FrenchFrench
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57 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 3/5Answerer confidence 3/5
try approaches instead of variants


Explanation:
1. Description of the possible aproaches to the creation of a data security system in the client-server architecture
2. Description of the possible aproaches to create a data security system in the client-server architecture

Nik-On/Off
Ukraine
Local time: 14:13
Native speaker of: Native in RussianRussian, Native in UkrainianUkrainian
PRO pts in category: 12
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7 hrs   confidence: Answerer confidence 3/5Answerer confidence 3/5
Possible variants in creating client-server architecture data security system


Explanation:
How about that? "Description of" isn't really necessary.

Suzan Hamer
Netherlands
Local time: 13:13
Native speaker of: English
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