"attracted to discovering it" (AGAIN)

English translation: My shot

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English term or phrase:"attracted to discovering it" (AGAIN)
Selected answer:My shot
Entered by: Maria Gomez

15:28 Jun 15, 2006
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Art/Literary - Linguistics / attracted to discovering it
English term or phrase: "attracted to discovering it" (AGAIN)
The sentence in English reads:

"I was surprised by American culture and how different was from mine and that is why I feel so attracted to discovering it."

I dont want a translation. I just need your help to make this sentence sound "more native"
Thanks to everyone!
(Also those who already answered)
Maria Gomez
United Arab Emirates
Local time: 00:41
My shot
Explanation:
I was very surprised by how different American culture was from mine. That is what attracted me and why I am so interested in exploring it further.

The "...culture was from mine" might be changed to 'is from mine' if the person is still here and is still experiencing the culture. If not, use 'was.'

Also, a style note: Some languages tend to denote the level of education by how long a person can make a sentence. This is less the case in the USA. While you may have long sentences, shorter is usually better.

My thoughts from the USA.
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jccantrell
United States
Local time: 13:41
Grading comment
Thanks a lot for you help!!!!!
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SUMMARY OF ALL EXPLANATIONS PROVIDED
4 +4My shot
jccantrell
4none
Rio Akasaka
3feel a strong urge to explore it fully
Balasubramaniam L.


  

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attracted to discover it
feel a strong urge to explore it fully


Explanation:
American culture surprised me completely, it was so different from mine; that is why I feel a strong urge to explore it fully."

Balasubramaniam L.
India
Local time: 02:11
Native speaker of: Native in HindiHindi
PRO pts in category: 12
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"attracted to discovering it"
none


Explanation:
I was surprised at how different the American culture is from mine, which is why I am so interested in discovering it.

Although this sentence might warrant a division into two, I think the above does capture the essence of the phrase, and links it together in such a fashion as to make it sound "more native". *Attracted* does not go very well with *discovering* something. Even better than *discovering* American culture would be to *learn more about it*.

... which is why I am so interested in learning more about it.

Rio Akasaka
France
Local time: 21:41
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish, Native in JapaneseJapanese
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18 mins   confidence: Answerer confidence 4/5Answerer confidence 4/5 peer agreement (net): +4
My shot


Explanation:
I was very surprised by how different American culture was from mine. That is what attracted me and why I am so interested in exploring it further.

The "...culture was from mine" might be changed to 'is from mine' if the person is still here and is still experiencing the culture. If not, use 'was.'

Also, a style note: Some languages tend to denote the level of education by how long a person can make a sentence. This is less the case in the USA. While you may have long sentences, shorter is usually better.

My thoughts from the USA.

jccantrell
United States
Local time: 13:41
Native speaker of: Native in EnglishEnglish
PRO pts in category: 31
Grading comment
Thanks a lot for you help!!!!!

Peer comments on this answer (and responses from the answerer)
agree  Rachel Vanarsdall
51 mins

agree  Refugio
1 hr

agree  npis: Agreed with your style note. One exception though, US laws. I once read a clause of a state act that was half a page long with one period at the end. :-)
1 hr
  -> Yes, lawyers do NOT count as native English speakers. And patents are a whole other problem!

agree  Asghar Bhatti: But Law is common sense and common sense is something most un common.
3 hrs
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